Really enjoyed this Claudia. Love the emotion descriptions and character interactions. The Ghost is an intriguing character. The dialogue is a little too staccato for me, I struggled twice to work out the speaker. Looking forward to the next part!
I really liked the scene when they all stare at the Ghost and Mason goes to poke him. A very vivid scene. Through the Ghost's dialogue, he is losing a lot of the mystery and threat, yet remains intriguing. We cannot be sure which side he is on, or can we?
I never quite took to the game as much or others (I had a fair few issues with some of the choices and dialogue from the protagonist), but it's a fascinating premise the robot had this specific manner that was at times somewhat unsettling. Those are my random Monday thoughts 🤪
Fantastic, Claudia. Great tension built through the initial calm, alongside the everpresent presence of the Ghost, that really builds toward the end. I was thinking: Will she? Won't she? What will happen if she does?!!
This line captured Fanny and Alaska so well:
‘Do you want me to persuade you not to do it?’ Fanny says, looking into her sister’s eyes. ‘Or did you already persuade yourself?’
I can really sense two sisters looking at each other in this moment.
And then the ending! And now I'm wanting to know what will happen next.
The Seed Grower - Part III
Really enjoyed this Claudia. Love the emotion descriptions and character interactions. The Ghost is an intriguing character. The dialogue is a little too staccato for me, I struggled twice to work out the speaker. Looking forward to the next part!
I really liked the scene when they all stare at the Ghost and Mason goes to poke him. A very vivid scene. Through the Ghost's dialogue, he is losing a lot of the mystery and threat, yet remains intriguing. We cannot be sure which side he is on, or can we?
Really wonderful story, Claudia. I finally got a chance to read it.
PS it's not at all the same thing, but reading of the Ghost really evoked in my mind the robot in the game Heaven's Vault: https://store.steampowered.com/app/774201/Heavens_Vault
I never quite took to the game as much or others (I had a fair few issues with some of the choices and dialogue from the protagonist), but it's a fascinating premise the robot had this specific manner that was at times somewhat unsettling. Those are my random Monday thoughts 🤪
Fantastic, Claudia. Great tension built through the initial calm, alongside the everpresent presence of the Ghost, that really builds toward the end. I was thinking: Will she? Won't she? What will happen if she does?!!
This line captured Fanny and Alaska so well:
‘Do you want me to persuade you not to do it?’ Fanny says, looking into her sister’s eyes. ‘Or did you already persuade yourself?’
I can really sense two sisters looking at each other in this moment.
And then the ending! And now I'm wanting to know what will happen next.