I hope there will be more after the third part. I think this will go well as a series. Go into each character and each one would have their own secrets. Also some back-story would be nice. How did Mason come to be, a previous partner or some kind of breeding program?
Aug 11, 2023·edited Aug 14, 2023Liked by Claudia Befu
Yes, reading backwards subverts the brain's fill-in feature, which is what makes finding typos and missed words so difficult.
I guess the scary thing will be if -- like supposedly playing a Beatles' record backwards -- some hidden semantic meaning emerges and you get messages from Hell, unintended in your forward-directed writing. I don't know why the presumption is that such reversals of musical (or as we are saying for possibly any creative) work would necessarily produce diabolical semantics. I mean, if you were to play the ramblings of writings by known "bad guys" or, say advertisements, [in reverse] would saintly messages emerge with nine choirs of Angels singing in the background? This is what makes me suspicious of the whole "backwards" angle regard musical pieces. I have never really been convinced to the supposed demonstrations regarding musical works. It mostly sounds like rwah-whah-ruhn-rah gibberish.
Only a fiction writer could deal with this stuff without becoming unhinged., hopefully.
[Possible Typo.] Miss, Befu, did you mean 'gapes': "Alaska gaps at the trail of bots squirming at the girl’s feet?"
Also, I loved the confluence of this line above, "Corn. Corn. Corn. Everything is corn. This is corn. And this is corn. And this is corn.," with my favorite scenes and lines, by Robert DuVall in the movie, Second Hand Lions: "Corn, corn, corn. nothin' but corn."
You are developing a great world. Every story reveals greater detail and more character development. I started this series with part one of The seed grower and had to go back and read Human Island and am now starting to get a feel for this world and its story line. I think your doing a great job of developing this world, and it will support many, many, more stories and I hope you continue to develop them. I am really starting to enjoy your writing.
I hope there will be more after the third part. I think this will go well as a series. Go into each character and each one would have their own secrets. Also some back-story would be nice. How did Mason come to be, a previous partner or some kind of breeding program?
Nice continuation, Claudia.
I love it, the scene with the blue corn and honey, reminds me our Merida trip-🥰
Excellent, maybe too short. 😉
Great Part II, Claudia, really excited for Part III.
Yes, reading backwards subverts the brain's fill-in feature, which is what makes finding typos and missed words so difficult.
I guess the scary thing will be if -- like supposedly playing a Beatles' record backwards -- some hidden semantic meaning emerges and you get messages from Hell, unintended in your forward-directed writing. I don't know why the presumption is that such reversals of musical (or as we are saying for possibly any creative) work would necessarily produce diabolical semantics. I mean, if you were to play the ramblings of writings by known "bad guys" or, say advertisements, [in reverse] would saintly messages emerge with nine choirs of Angels singing in the background? This is what makes me suspicious of the whole "backwards" angle regard musical pieces. I have never really been convinced to the supposed demonstrations regarding musical works. It mostly sounds like rwah-whah-ruhn-rah gibberish.
Only a fiction writer could deal with this stuff without becoming unhinged., hopefully.
[Possible Typo.] Miss, Befu, did you mean 'gapes': "Alaska gaps at the trail of bots squirming at the girl’s feet?"
Also, I loved the confluence of this line above, "Corn. Corn. Corn. Everything is corn. This is corn. And this is corn. And this is corn.," with my favorite scenes and lines, by Robert DuVall in the movie, Second Hand Lions: "Corn, corn, corn. nothin' but corn."
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YjoJ2QH3Rkw
You are developing a great world. Every story reveals greater detail and more character development. I started this series with part one of The seed grower and had to go back and read Human Island and am now starting to get a feel for this world and its story line. I think your doing a great job of developing this world, and it will support many, many, more stories and I hope you continue to develop them. I am really starting to enjoy your writing.
Excellent! The writing feels careful and intentional. It’s a fascinating world, and I love that beekeepers are the symbols of resistance!
Another great read, Claudia. Lots of nice details in here that continue to add to the world.
The tension notched up with this one. I was fervently scrolling through, wondering if she'll get caught and who she can or can't trust.
I love the quality of the AI Ghost, the description of it, Alaska's fear of it. So good!
Just noted a couple of typos: I think there's a "gaps" that was meant to be "gasps", and a "starring" that should be "staring".
Also, the tattoo on the palm. Is Shia worried about being relatively open about her sign of the resistance, or is that not an issue?
Fun, I love this!