Claudia, I’ve finally indulged in reading your story. I’m so intrigued! The “letter from the future” format reminds me of a Joanna Macy exercise of the same name from her book, “Coming Back to Life.” Are you familiar with it? I can send a scan, if not.
The conflict between tech and organic life is well-drawn here. As an endgame of the “tech will save us” trope, this has an eerie ring. I can’t wait to see what happens. And, yes, I’ll go back and start from the beginning now. 😊
Thank you for your feedback, Julie, and for taking the time to read. 💚 One of the main themes of my series is highlighting the importance of ecosystems for our survival and what it means to live in a world of scarcity, without the basic things that we take for granted such as water and food which are provided by the nature that we so much despise in our technological age.
I don't know Joanna Macy but after googling her book shortly I'm left very interested. I'll add it to my ever-growing Goodreads list.
I'm looking forward to your feedback when you get to reading the rest. 🤗
Amazing, Claudia! Superb world building through this letter. Lots of details and info -- some already known through the other stories, but told and reinforced through this entry -- that just add so much realism to your world and tale. I love the letter format and can't wait for more, to see where this goes and what twists and turns it might take. 👏🤩😍
Thank you Nathan, really appreciate the feedback! I like writing the letters because I still feel more comfortable with writing shorter pieces. I would like to explore this short format more in the future, not sure how yet but I have a story in mind that I want to write once I'm done with There Is Hope. Six stories to go. Not a word written yet. 😅 But lots of ideas roaming in my head.
That's great, keep it up! Explore away 😁 My inbox will be waiting 😉
Heh, well ... I'm struggling to juggle covering all the things I want to when only posting once a week, whilst also struggling to make sure I have enough time to be writing all the things I want to 😅
There's 2x new Precipe chapters inbound (under editing) and another Brae being written, so it's getting there!
Using these Memory Logs as a means of exposition and world-building is unobtrusive and opens the reader up to explore the world more. It reads very factual, in the form of a diary, which makes it believable and helps to immerse the reader. Well done, Claudia.
Thanks Alexander, really appreciate the feedback and glad to know that the logs resonate and round up the world. They turned out to be a great tool for storytelling and I think I'll make as much use of them as I can. 😅
We should organize society, our public school systems and job training programs, around the concept of collective ownership instead of private businesses.
REMOVE MONEY, REMOVE CORRUPTION
If every worker got in exchange for their professional careers everything that they needed to have a happy, balanced life in a safe and healthy world governed by fair laws and modern practices, then our use of science and ethics to generate daily goods and services, as basic human entitlements, will have fulfilled the purpose of socialism: to ensure “universal protections for all by all” without using money anymore or national currencies to uphold private capital, maintain structural wealth, or support banks and financing and other profit-making activities.
I love the idea of collective ownership and I'm interested in learning from history how archaic societies lived it and also thinking about how we could take these learnings and combine them with technology to create a bright new future.
Though as someone who grew up in communism, I still wonder what is the best way to sign such a future. I will for sure dive into this topic more in the future. In the meantime, you might like this article I wrote: https://www.storyvoyager.com/p/allow-me-to-get-rich-and-i-will-save
Thanks Garrett, always good to read from you. I enjoy writing the letters from the future and they are a result of writing my series as I go on Substack. This experience shapes the story in ways I didn’t anticipate.
Welcome to Story Voyager, it's great having you here and thanks a lot for the feedback. This is truly appreciated and keeps me going! ☺️ The next story will come around December, I am just starting to work on it. In the meantime you can have a look at the first two stories from the series. Looking forward to reading from again!
Claudia, I’ve finally indulged in reading your story. I’m so intrigued! The “letter from the future” format reminds me of a Joanna Macy exercise of the same name from her book, “Coming Back to Life.” Are you familiar with it? I can send a scan, if not.
The conflict between tech and organic life is well-drawn here. As an endgame of the “tech will save us” trope, this has an eerie ring. I can’t wait to see what happens. And, yes, I’ll go back and start from the beginning now. 😊
Thank you for your feedback, Julie, and for taking the time to read. 💚 One of the main themes of my series is highlighting the importance of ecosystems for our survival and what it means to live in a world of scarcity, without the basic things that we take for granted such as water and food which are provided by the nature that we so much despise in our technological age.
I don't know Joanna Macy but after googling her book shortly I'm left very interested. I'll add it to my ever-growing Goodreads list.
I'm looking forward to your feedback when you get to reading the rest. 🤗
Amazing, Claudia! Superb world building through this letter. Lots of details and info -- some already known through the other stories, but told and reinforced through this entry -- that just add so much realism to your world and tale. I love the letter format and can't wait for more, to see where this goes and what twists and turns it might take. 👏🤩😍
Thank you Nathan, really appreciate the feedback! I like writing the letters because I still feel more comfortable with writing shorter pieces. I would like to explore this short format more in the future, not sure how yet but I have a story in mind that I want to write once I'm done with There Is Hope. Six stories to go. Not a word written yet. 😅 But lots of ideas roaming in my head.
How are your novellas going on?
That's great, keep it up! Explore away 😁 My inbox will be waiting 😉
Heh, well ... I'm struggling to juggle covering all the things I want to when only posting once a week, whilst also struggling to make sure I have enough time to be writing all the things I want to 😅
There's 2x new Precipe chapters inbound (under editing) and another Brae being written, so it's getting there!
Wow, sounds like you've been productive! I'm looking forward to reading new episodes from your series.
There are not enough words for me to rave over this.
Thank you so much, that’s very kind of you! 💚🌸
A little heavy on detail, but a great start. Looking forward to reading more.
😅 This is the sequel of this story: https://www.storyvoyager.com/p/the-seed-grower-part-i
Using these Memory Logs as a means of exposition and world-building is unobtrusive and opens the reader up to explore the world more. It reads very factual, in the form of a diary, which makes it believable and helps to immerse the reader. Well done, Claudia.
Thanks Alexander, really appreciate the feedback and glad to know that the logs resonate and round up the world. They turned out to be a great tool for storytelling and I think I'll make as much use of them as I can. 😅
We should organize society, our public school systems and job training programs, around the concept of collective ownership instead of private businesses.
REMOVE MONEY, REMOVE CORRUPTION
If every worker got in exchange for their professional careers everything that they needed to have a happy, balanced life in a safe and healthy world governed by fair laws and modern practices, then our use of science and ethics to generate daily goods and services, as basic human entitlements, will have fulfilled the purpose of socialism: to ensure “universal protections for all by all” without using money anymore or national currencies to uphold private capital, maintain structural wealth, or support banks and financing and other profit-making activities.
#ScientificSocialism
I love the idea of collective ownership and I'm interested in learning from history how archaic societies lived it and also thinking about how we could take these learnings and combine them with technology to create a bright new future.
Though as someone who grew up in communism, I still wonder what is the best way to sign such a future. I will for sure dive into this topic more in the future. In the meantime, you might like this article I wrote: https://www.storyvoyager.com/p/allow-me-to-get-rich-and-i-will-save
The few countries that went communist neglected the part about not using money anymore, so it’s fair to say that true socialism has never been tried.
Love the inclusion of this, Claudia. Love the angle(s) and depth it offers. Really great work.
Thanks Garrett, always good to read from you. I enjoy writing the letters from the future and they are a result of writing my series as I go on Substack. This experience shapes the story in ways I didn’t anticipate.
This was my first read of your work as I just recently subscribed, I thoroughly enjoyed it! I’m excited to read more!
Welcome to Story Voyager, it's great having you here and thanks a lot for the feedback. This is truly appreciated and keeps me going! ☺️ The next story will come around December, I am just starting to work on it. In the meantime you can have a look at the first two stories from the series. Looking forward to reading from again!
Thanks, happy writing!
Thank you, Brian!