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Nathan Slake's avatar

This is a very good and thrilling continuation, Claudia. Great tension at the end. You leave us desperate to know what happens!

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Claudia Befu's avatar

Thank you, Nathan! It's been such a rollercoaster writing this in real time, I fear the upcoming Sunday 😬. At the same time, it's so much fun plotting the story for these cliffhangers 😅! Especially because I myself don't know exactly what will come in the next episode...

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Nathan Slake's avatar

I know this feeling well. 😄

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Claudia Befu's avatar

And now I do too… 😜 It’s quite addictive!

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Stephanie Loomis's avatar

Beautifully done

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Claudia Befu's avatar

Thank you, Stephanie, really appreciate it 💚.

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Nadia Gerassimenko's avatar

The way you captured a child's complex feelings (add to that hormones...eeep!) is raw and real. And I feel so protective of a child who gets nagged by adults who don't get it; they're still a child even if they're blooming!

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Claudia Befu's avatar

It‘s a strange time in a girl’s life. I will never forget it. Everything changes and it’s hard to make sense of it. I wanted to depict that in this episode and I’m happy that it resonated. Thanks Nadia💚

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Nadia Gerassimenko's avatar

It’s well written and captured, Claudia!!

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Claudia Befu's avatar

You made my day! 🫶

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Nadia Gerassimenko's avatar

<3

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Johnathan Reid's avatar

Have I praised your world-building enough already? 😊 You introduce new characters and factions well - enough subtle details to remember without info-dumping. I look forward to the protagonist's journey, as her expectations and allegiances adapt within a coming-of-age arc. And I have a feeling we'll be seeing more of that green-eyed young man...

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Claudia Befu's avatar

Thank you, Johnathan, I put so much work in the worldbuilding and I feel immense satisfaction every time it resonates. This character will play an essential role in an upcoming longer fiction (hopefully a novel) and I'm walking a fine line here. Revealing enough for the story to be interesting without spoiling future work.

The green-eyed young man, a coming of age girl... yeah, thinly veiled plot. 😅

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Claudia Befu's avatar

Thanks, Keyon! Let's see how part 3 will turn out.

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